David Ogilvy's Copywriting Technique That Made a Homeless Man's Cup Runneth Over …
I hope you've enjoyed this week's Writer's Life as we’ve examined some of the most innovative ad campaigns of the past 10 years or so.
I want to end the week with a story about copywriting legend David Ogilvy featured in the book The Idea Writers, by Teressa Iezzi.
He was walking down the street one morning when he encountered a blind homeless man begging.
The sign read:
I am blind, please help.
His donation cup was empty.
Ogilvy paused and rather than putting some money in the man's cup, he took the man's sign and rewrote it.
When he left his office later in the day, the homeless man's cup was overflowing with money.
So what had Ogilvy written on the man's sign?
Instead of just conveying information (I am blind) and asking for an action (please help), it now told a story.
Using just seven words, Ogilvy conjured up an image in people's minds that played to their imaginations, fueled their emotions, and lit their memories on fire.
The homeless man's sign now read:
It is spring, and I am blind.
When people read the sign, they immediately thought of their own springtime memories.
The beauty of a cool spring morning. The exhilaration of flowers blooming and nature in all its glory. The pretty girls (or handsome guys) dressed casually enjoying a sunny day.
They thought of all that — and then of how this poor man was deprived of enjoying any of it.
Their empathy for the man made them open up their hearts (and wallets and purses) to him.
Great story, wouldn't you agree?
It turns out there is more to the story … or should I say "less."
Earlier this morning, Nick Usborne saw the original version of today's issue on the AWAI website. He immediately emailed me with a subject line that read: It wasn’t David Ogilvy!
The story, which has become part of advertising folklore, was based on an actual incident in the life of French poet Jacques Prevert.
In addition, both of the key lines are different!
Here is the Prévert story (using a poem by American poet David Kirby as the source):
Prévert saw a beggar who had a sign that said "Blind Man Without a Pension."
Prévert asked him how it was going.
The beggar replied …
"Oh, very badly. People pass by and drop nothing in my hat, the swine."
Prévert took the sign from him and altered it.
A few days later, he went up to the beggar and again asked him how things were going.
The beggar said, "Fantastic! My hat fills up three times a day."
Prévert had written the following on the beggar's sign:
"Spring is coming, but I won't see it."
When I first read the Ogilvy story I thought it was a great story. But I think Prévert's story is even better. Not only because I like his line better, but because it actually happened.
Thank you Nick your value input into today's issue.
But either way, the lesson here is the power of the story. Stories allow you to "show, not tell." Stories give you the power to tap into your reader’s imagination and trigger deeper emotions.
And once you’ve tapped those emotions, your readers are more likely to take the action you want them to — such as giving you their contact information or buying your product.
What do you think of Prévert 's line and "Ogilvy's" line? Which do you like better? Do you have other examples of great storytelling in a headline? If so, post them here.
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